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1 Revisions: 1/09/2011
Because I jumped straight from revising the first Collection,
I automatically used Marcy O'Donnell at the start of the story, thinking I was going directly to the Mission. I didn't realized
at the time I was jumping over three or more years. luckily, nor did I realize he was going to run into another
woman with children! In trying to look up the names and ages of the children I discovered how I'd transposed what I'd just
written from the chronological order of the novels-one reason i was documenting everything when my computer crashed. At the
very least,rather than stop writing for another seven or eight weeks, I'll change the woman and the reason she's traveling
with them. As for having two widows, I've been thinking it would be an excellent chance to show a woman's status and allow
Deborah [originally Donna] to revel her depth of courage and basic nature. I tried to write it out in depth but the computer
froze and wiped out everything, so I'm just going to work ont he site and allow it to happen. But wanted to give thee a head's
up if you wonder at the sudden changes on a work being written online. 
REVISIONS
12 January 2011
I've been very concerned about how serious and violent "Stands By The Shoulder" has become so I looked at it
and decided that since it follows "Autumn" I thought it might be easier to bring the new Reader in at Paul's return
to the house to pick up Marcy and her brood, and then bring Loretta back in AFTER they leave the fort. Since I don't
have to wait to see if this will crash or not, I think I'll go dtraight to work. I'm going to transfer everything down one
chapter and just keep the openning lines.
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